Talk:ORAS demos announced for more countries

Edit Request

Could someone proofread through this article and make it look a tad more professional? Reading through it a few times I noticed the following things should probably be fixed:

• Change the ampersands to "and"s.
• The sentence "The demo code you be given on October 16," in the second paragraph.
• In the third paragraph, "In South Africa, the demo will be available..."
• The second to last paragraph needs a period at the end.
• The last paragraph reads strangely to me, and there are some run-on sentences and comma splices that make it sound a little unprofessional.
• The registration links look out of place in the middle of the article. I think they should be moved to the end of the article, but that one's just my opinion.

slimey01 16:02, 29 September 2014 (UTC)